Luminous Smile

Friday, August 08, 2014 15 Comments A+ a-

Luminous Smile



She felt elated in his arms and felt free from the age-old traditions the burden of which she was carrying for years on her shoulders.

Her twelve years old son, her only companion after her husband's death just entered the room at that moment in muddy clothes.

He was shocked to see a man hugging his mother but he noticed that her mother was happy which he never saw when she was with his vicious father who use to beat her daily.

He once pushed his father from terrace to liberate her mother from his cruelty and now he smiled in confirmation of her mother's relation which liberated her from burden of useless traditions.

His smile for her was more luminous than a moon or a star which had brighten her dark life.


This post is linked to Three Word Wednesday (liberated,vicious and muddy) and Five Sentence Fiction (luminous).

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Usha Menon
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August 8, 2014 at 2:38 PM delete

Nice short story. There is nothing wrong to forget the relationship which was painful . Good her son also accepted it.

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August 8, 2014 at 5:24 PM delete

Very lovely and full of feeling.

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August 8, 2014 at 7:36 PM delete

This is wonderfully written, a very powerful piece.
Thank you for visiting us at Poetry of the Netherworld.

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August 8, 2014 at 8:41 PM delete

Nice one! A son who understands her mother, what else could she wish for :)

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vishalbheeroo
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August 9, 2014 at 3:34 AM delete

Beautiful and touching. I am happy the son understand that his mother needs the love of someone respecting her.

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Anmol Rawat
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August 9, 2014 at 4:01 AM delete

A good message filled with emotions :)

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blackbeauty
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August 9, 2014 at 1:50 PM delete

That's like a true son. However I felt bad for the boy. Killing distorts one's spirit :(

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ruchi2312
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August 9, 2014 at 10:50 PM delete

Vivid imagination & full of emotions, well-narrated.
Good wishes :-)

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August 10, 2014 at 1:31 AM delete

a son who understand's relationship....I liked how you combined 2 different contributions into one...innovative indeed. One thing I noticed - "He once pushed her father from terrace".....shouldn't it be "He once pushed his father from terrace"?...sorry if I over thought that!

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cifar shayar
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August 10, 2014 at 5:53 PM delete

Thank you for your valuable comment, I have corrected my mistake.

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Kokila Gupta
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August 11, 2014 at 2:11 PM delete

Its good to start fresh and new then to bear the dead,lifeless relations ....

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Red Handed
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August 11, 2014 at 5:40 PM delete

He did what had to be done..
Good one!

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Sherri Hayter
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August 11, 2014 at 7:26 PM delete

Another chance - all of humanity deserves it <3

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